During the 1760s and 1770s, the years leading up to the American Revolution, forced many people to choose to be loyalist or patriot.
Britain was all about gaining power at this time but, didn't have everything to effectively do so. They would force and persuade many neutrals to gain their trust and allegiance. Neutrals were people that didn't know what side to be on and the choice didn't matter so much to them. Being a Neutralist was very powerful at this time because they could either choose to be a loyalist or a patriot. Patriots were favored by the British because they seemed to have power and were very forceful towards the loyalists. Being a loyalist wasn't always a bad thing, if you were loyalist, you had good connections to England by culture and economics. The main reason that England and Loyalist had a connection was because they both believed in having a monarchy and aristocracy in government, making it stable. A large amount of loyalists continued being loyal to the crown in the 1770s, to keep the power that they had intact. The patriots only task was to increase their own power, by doing what they had to, being violent and vulgar to the loyalists. The social issues effecting my choice to be loyalist or patriot are the way the British treat the loyalists. The British and the patriots called loyalists Tories, which was a slang or rude term to describe the loyalists.
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Good start, one thing you might consider doing is to have some sort of hook. It'll make the reader enjoy the essay more.
Some critiques:
-They say/I say: You don't really have much of that, Craig wants template use and for you to show knowledge that you have read the book.
-Purpose: To me your purpose isn't really clear, it doesn't seem to have much tone/voice. I know this is a rough rough draft, but I'm just sayin whats on the rubric.
-Critical Thinking & Analysis: There isn't much analysis, but you do good with the critical thinking. Its a hugeeee chunk of your grade, so maybe more focus on it?
-Structure & Organization: As of right now I don't see an intro or conclu or any definitive paragraphs with separate ideas. lol like I said, I know its a rough rough draft, just stating what I saw though. =]
-Development of Historic Themes (aka they say): Yo seem to have a grasp on the ideas of back then, but not much they say is really used.
-misc.: use some quotes, it makes your essay valid.
-overall, great start.
The beginning of your essay needs to be really strong. It feels almost like you dont have an opening paragraph, it hust kinda jumps right in, leaving the reader questioning. I think that you also need to make it more clear that you are a loyalist because talking about the neutrals and patriots before makes it sound like your on a diiferent side. "Neurtalist" doesn't need to be capitalized.
I think that you have some really good key points, like the part about monarchy and aristocracy,I would expand on it. But you need to expand on your whole essay, get those points for why you are loyalist and make it in depth so that the reader can understand. Make a " creative risk!"
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